A Blue Hour Forum

Ok, after I read the second book and Edward left, i was so incredibly depressed, that i made up a poem, i don't think its that bad, considering ive never really wrote anything before, tell me if you like it!

P.S: You could probably give the "you"s and "I"s names lol


Around You

Your voice is so beatiful
Words can not dircribe
It pains me to see you leavin’
But we both knew
We both knew

I can’t be around you
Can’t stand to see your face
Knowing its gone
With every touch
And every smile
My heart breaks

I try to remember
How to breath
When u kiss my lips
I dream
A sleep-less dream

Trying to capture
Every scene
Of you and me together
But it falls apart
Just keep on breaking my heart
Like you don’t even care
That I’m there

So why do I even try
Is there anyway to change your mind
But I know you’ve got to go
While I sit here
Thinkin’ ‘bout you

I liked it a lot!!! Excellent for a first time!

Omg, it's really great ! It describes so well how she feels =D

Ok, I haven't done much work to it, it just kinda came to me i guess lol. I like to think that its not Twilight related, but....idk


Heart~Broken

Time is Ticking
Don’t you wish you
could start thinking
About all the things
you could have said to me

Wasting all this time
trying to figure why
u walked away from this
not a word a second kiss

your running away
And I’m not gonna follow you
I don’t really know
Who’s at your side,
Who even cares
if it makes me cry

Im running away
And I don’t wanna see you again
So just go;
leave me here,
Heart-Broken

It could easily be the lyrics of a song, i think .. Good job !

thanks! My friend has a really good voice, so she said she would help =D

Really ? That would be so cool to actually make a song of it ö

Oki, this one i just wrote yesterday, and its my favorite so far!

Beautiful

You know its all I
Ever think about
Your all I
Ever Dream about
Its all I can ever do
Just sit here thinking about you
And I discard
Every word that ever meant harm
Cuz all that matters is that your here with me

Can't you take the words from my head and make them Oh so real

Can't you take the words from my head and make them beautiful like you are to me

So just please, please, please, promise you'll be there for me
and never leave my side

Never leave my side

Can't you take the words from my head and make them Oh so real

Can't you take the words from my head and make them beautiful

Beautiful....

Omg, you really have a talent there !
I thnk i like Around you the best so far

I agree you are definitely talented!

Oki, this is my latest one, Its from the beginning of New Moon, when Edward leaves (to help Bella - tried to put that in there lol) from Edwards perspective, hope you like it!!

Goodbye

I'm ashamed of what I am
And I know that there are things
I can never give to you
And you deserve so much better than me
but I said I'd never leave you alone again

I'm gonna try to make this better for us
I'm gonna give it all up

So don't even try to follow me
Cuz I'm no where to be seen

So to just make this easy;

I don't need you anymore
I never really cared about you
And I don't want you

So I guess this is our goodbye...

Goodbye

Wow! these are amazing, really great stuff! and I am not just saying that, I was junior editor for my high school literary magazine and I featured stuff like yours!

wow thanks, I really love hearing comments from you guys!